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Cry Me a River (Cliche's Workshop Poem)
It's all good when some say
Keep it on the down low
then it ain't nothing but a chicken wing
There are those that insist on having it their way
Too hot to trot when expected to change
Then talk a mile a minute tuning out understanding
At other times too many cooks spoil the broth
then Silence is golden
and emotions are free as a bird
When love is blind
sex becomes a necessary evil and
all hands to the pump lose control
Once the lesser of two evils
makes vital an acid test
that’s scarce as hen's teeth
It’s the icing on the cake
when I'm game and
rotten to the core
A rolling stone gathers no moss
just like a seven year itch has any release
so keep your nose to the grindstone
Seeking a way to love life
come Knock it out of the park
and Knock the cover off the ball
then you will see Age before beauty
is as Fresh as a summer's rain
and Deeper than the deepest ocean
Now cry me a river because you
can't have your cake and eat it too
when demanding the best of two worlds
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Free verse
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Favorite Poets
Billy Collins, Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Whitman, Jess Tapper
Comments
Kailashana2
Thu, 2011-06-23 14:37
Like I said we may have
Like I said we may have started a new genre of poems. Cliched but loving it.
We should get a book of these poems together and call it Neopoet's best cliched poems, don't you just love it?
~A
but why the hit & miss caps?
Barbara Writes
Thu, 2011-06-23 14:49
yes i am loving this
Neopoet's best cliched poems. a book sounds good to me
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author commentHooded Stranger
Thu, 2011-06-23 15:03
Barbara
Barbara,
I must say most impressive indeed and you have more cliches...are there more on our list now?
regards,
HS
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2011-06-23 15:07
HS
i don't think my three is there, i included them thinking Chrys might add them to the list. if not it is written in a way that removing the ending won't affect the poem much
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author commentRace_9togo
Thu, 2011-06-23 19:53
Hiya Barb
Wow, not bad at all, you actually made a poem outta that rubbish, lol!
Good job.
Respectfully, Race
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Barbara Writes
Thu, 2011-06-23 21:19
Hiya Jim
thanks, as hard as it was it turn out not to be so hard
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author commentloved
Thu, 2011-06-23 20:08
its full of cliches,but you have not used the most common ones
every cloud has a silver lining
all see breasts
but your heart is chicken
hard as stone
but its only bone
and so on like
till the cows come home
they deeper the well
more the gold
smile and the world smiles
weep and u weep alone
right cliches or not
don't count ur chicken
before they are hatched and
so onnnnnnnnnn
good effort my u r my examiner
i must say
well doneeeeennddd
loved
Barbara Writes
Thu, 2011-06-23 21:21
Hi loved
these are the cliches that were given by Chrys
thanks for reading and commenting
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author commentloved
Thu, 2011-06-23 21:31
thanks
Pardon my ignorance i have posted one
loved
Barbara Writes
Thu, 2011-06-23 23:54
hey loved
Me and you should take votes to see who would win more mentally challenged lol
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author commentloved
Thu, 2011-06-23 23:38
me and you should take votes to see who is the most mentally cha
me and you should take votes to see who is the most...UMEAN MORE,.... mentally challenged lol
obviously me,
its an open challenge
you win saying that
for persons like me,
have to be challenged
To liberate
And SET them free
TO THE POINT OF DERANGEMENT,
IN ORDER TO BE COMPETING
IN POETRY COMPETITIONS
WITH STALWARTS....
ON THE DIRECTIONS OF EDDIE!
WHO is to blame don't ask me.
loved
Barbara Writes
Thu, 2011-06-23 23:44
loved
I'd get the more votes for mentally challenge as I have no idea what you are talking about.
"obviously me,
its an open challenge
you win saying that
for persons like me,
have to be challenged
To liberate
And SET them free"
because NOBODY have to be mentally challenged to liberate.
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author commentlou
Thu, 2011-06-23 23:48
Hi
I think you made a good job of it.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Barbara Writes
Fri, 2011-06-24 00:00
Hi Lou
thanks
it kinda fun trying to make good poetry out of cliches. people need a lot of creativity to make cliches work because cliches will bore you to blindness lol
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author commentEduardo Cruz
Fri, 2011-06-24 00:09
Barbara
good job,
these damn cliches threw me off when I wrote mine.
thank the cosmos, I went be graded for this, because for sure i'd get an "F"
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Barbara Writes
Fri, 2011-06-24 00:15
Eddie
thanks challenges only make us better later
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author commentEduardo Cruz
Fri, 2011-06-24 00:17
not this one for me
not this one for me
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Barbara Writes
Fri, 2011-06-24 00:24
you already good at what you do
writing bad poetry with cliches is what this workshop is all about
isn't it
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author commentBarbara Writes
Fri, 2011-06-24 00:24
you already good at what you do
writing bad poetry with cliches is what this workshop is all about
isn't it
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author commentBarbara Writes
Fri, 2011-06-24 00:25
you already good at what you do
duplicATE
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author commentCandlewitch
Fri, 2011-06-24 09:57
Workshop: Cliches and Their Uses
Dear Barbara,
You have done a very good job making a poem out of that messy list of cliches. I know it wasn't as easy as you made it look. You managed to keep some of your style in the structuring :)
always, Cat
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