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d e c a n t e r
copious example
held aloft
the good life
shinning through
beneath the bitter milk
and sour bread
we tilled the salt
with toil and sweat
trickle aches
the open dreams
like runoff streams
and miles bred
porchlight nocturna
waiting for visions
from heaven
and whispers from
the grasses
hunting bat
on moth glass
chase
drink heartily
these chaste
allowances
moonship bow
cresting
nestled clouds
the ring of
chimes
in clockwork
land
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Comments
Seren
Sun, 2013-11-10 00:54
Steven
As always I enjoyed the poem, but in this case I think that it could use some punctuation to provide more impact for the images you convey
porchlight nocturna
waiting for visions
from heaven
and whispers from
the grasses
my favourite Stanza it really brought back some memories for me
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
weirdelf
Sun, 2013-11-10 08:11
Do you ever do live readings?
I am sure they would be well received.
This, like most of your work, is fucking lovely and powerful.
Here is my take on it
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0LepH8DXdkC
shinning through [shining]
cheers,
Jess
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