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DUSKY TWILIGHT AT DAWN

Tonight let my mind free
to wander beyond eternity
collect sweet nectar
from bees
aliens maybe
beyond the distant dusking horizon
twilight of my life
be the birth
of another awesome morn
across wild oceans
where man with humanity
seeks to meet
as the sunrise at dawn tweets
newer born
twilight is once again torn
so let me be the harbinger of peace
for all humanity
trace my footsteps upon times domain
to show light to a candle
living darkness
what light 'twill be
can’t yet see
let a newer dawn
once again
awaken me

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Comments

that hangs together pretty well. Just one criticism, I think that I would use the word [harbinger] of peace, instead of [forebringer] of peace. ~ Geez.
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Hello, Lovedly,
You've created an inspiring poem. It brings gratitude for each day - present, past, and tomorrow. "...to show light to a candle." Beautiful. I agree with Geezer about the word "forbinger." Do you possibly mean forebearer? Inspiring poetry.
Thank you!
L

harbinger typo is corrected..laps top error

author comment

Long long ago
I have a deep ARCHIVES
at the bottom of the sea
MERCI

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captures some of the essences of life

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VICTOR D

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Nice poem!
I think you like to play with flowers and insect like bees.
Be optimistic, '...your life
be the birth
of another awesome morn
across wild oceans...'

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