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Hope Rekindled (explicit content)

Once again in mid September
Do I stand heart held in hand
To place upon your wanting altar
I want nothing but to understand

If all was dark, I’d see your eyes
Dispel my hunger with your lips
Quench my thirst between your thighs
Hands hold fast to silken hips

Plunging in this pool of yours
Like geothermal natural springs
Rekindled hope within my core
As half expired September sings

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Basically soft core pornography
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Explicit Content

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That is all, this is amazing erotica. Writing some myself I know how hard it is to write without it coming across as hardcore, but this is far from it, I keep finding amazing poetry in the undiscovered works and I am gobsmacked.

Applause, now for that cold shower

;)

Sincerely Jayne-Chloe

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

you have layers of worshiping lust and depths which we, your readers, have not yet discovered. reading this, I melted like butter. you are a masterpiece of a poet still in progress. my favorite lines are:

If all was dark, I’d see your eyes
Dispel my hunger with your lips
Quench my thirst between your thighs
Hands hold fast to silken hips

*a cat in awe

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Most of the stuff I write for the wife goes into the stream. I’m not sure if this was the one I felt may be too much or too “adult”. This particular poem was written on a card I gave her for our wedding anniversary back in September. I have another like this one I wrote this weekend (wink). It’s difficult to find that line between erotic or pornographic. I think it’s sits in different places for everyone.

We have two kids around; middle and elementary school age. We have to plan our date nights out and cherish them and they obviously don’t happen frequently enough for either of us. I can say this though, we are always building toward the next time. Every look, every kiss. I make sure I show physical affection in front of my children. I gross them right out.

Let’s face it, even in pornography projecting unrealistic expectations of sex (no plumber gets to your house to repair the pipes that quickly), those scenes are like 20 minutes. Lol.

For my money, sex is a constant. It’s the hot meal I cook her every morning and night. It’s going to bed (sleep) together. It’s openly communicating wants and needs without fear of judgment…and that’s the difference between erotica and pornography for me.

Thanks for reading
Tim

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