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maybe not

Submitted by Clobro on Tue, 2023-01-31 23:00

where has the bright love gone
it was almost gone
without me without you
who am i, just thinking about you
did you even love me back or

where does the glowing love go
i hope you don't go
i won't leave you i promised
and you said you'd soon have promised
wonder if you'll ever promise or

where is the sparkling love going
know i'm not going
know you're here with me forever
so know we're stuck here forever
but does anybody know for sure or

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
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Last few words: 
heartache
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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