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Missing

Submitted by Depressed 1 on Thu, 2022-09-29 07:31

One hot, stormy summer night
Mark and his parents had a fight
Was the last time Mark was seen
Mark vanished that night like a dream

Mary was said to be an adorable girl
Mary had brown eyes and hair of curls
Mary went out to make herself a new life
Mary was last seen with a man with a knife

Danny longed for a better life for himself
Danny never told anyone that he had left
Danny disappeared at the age of fourteen
That was the last time Danny was ever seen

Jasmine was in bed fast asleep one night
Her parents could not find her by daylight
Jasmine was only eight years old at the time
They found her lifeless bones when she was nine

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To report information about a missing or exploited child call the 24-Hour Call Center: 1-800-THE-LOST (1-800-843-5678) Report child sexual exploitation online at CyberTipline.org.
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Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Thu, 2022-09-29 12:36

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where you would expect to see a poem about missing persons! I have to admit, you have done a fine job and managed to get three stories told without being overly dramatic. You have done the 1-800-The Lost Network a great service! Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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Depressed 1

Fri, 2022-09-30 01:28

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Thanks Geezer. If life has taught me anything it is expect the unexpected.

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