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My Lovely Lady Grey
She sits serene, so statuesque,
not posed like dancer's arabesque.
Her features form a faithful face,
like goddess of a long-dead race.
She sparkles like the silver moon
on summer nights in flaming June.
Then sheds her lustre and her light
upon my dark and dreary night.
She's silent, sometimes, as the trees.
Unshook by breath of boisterous breeze.
Her heart, that’s of a tender kind,
is merged with melancholic mind.
She speaks and woos the weeping waves.
The beauty in her voice betrays
an angel, in a female frame.
Olympian, with human name.
Who is this purest, priceless pearl
dressed in the guise of goddess girl?
If you don't know by now, I'll tell.
All questioning I'll duly quell:
She is my lovely lady grey
who smiled on me one autumn day
when I was lifeless as a leaf,
fresh fallen in my godless grief.
Comments
neopoet
Thu, 2023-04-13 10:27
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "My Lovely Lady Grey" is a beautiful tribute to the persona's beloved. The language is graceful, and the imagery is vivid, creating a serene and ethereal atmosphere. The persona's admiration for their lady is expressed in a heartfelt and romantic manner.
One suggestion for line edit would be to replace "merged with" with "mingled with," as it would flow better with the rest of the poem's language.
The poem's structure is consistent, with four stanzas, each containing four lines. The rhyme scheme is ABAB, which adds to the poem's musical quality. The use of enjambment creates a smooth and natural flow, making the poem easy to read.
The use of personification is notable, as the lady is described as having a "tender kind" heart and speaking to the "weeping waves." This adds depth and personality to the lady, making her seem more than just a mere object of admiration.
Overall, "My Lovely Lady Grey" is a well-crafted and emotionally resonant poem that celebrates the beauty and grace of the persona's beloved. The language, imagery, and structure all work together to create a moving and memorable tribute.
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Geezer
Thu, 2023-04-13 11:35
I liked this...
very much! It seems as though she is a steady influence on your life and makes you feel good! Your title is good, the word use is better, and the whole thing hangs together nicely! Great job!
~ Geez.
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Blue-eyed Bolla
Thu, 2023-04-13 11:38
lady...
Many thanks, Geezer. Yeah, she has been my muse for many years. Glad Neo also gave it the thumbs up.
KBloor
Blue-eyed Bolla
Fri, 2023-04-14 08:47
lady...
Many thanks, Ekaterina. She would probably just roll her eyes. She is my Muse though.
KBloor