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Parties & parties ( Sunku Workshop )
Fireworks
Chocolate cakes
Party is on
Bullets
Guns and missles
Party is on
More blood
Death toll's up
Party is on
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Sorry if I'm becoming more pessimistic. Crimes against the humanity in Syria is beyond what anyone would imagine
Editing stage:
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Comments
raj
Sun, 2018-02-25 04:42
Hi Rula
A good Sunku which is in the context of the present scenario in our world.....no matter what's morally right or wrong...there are winners and loser in the game of life ,,,and life goes on...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Tue, 2018-02-27 12:01
dear Raj
V. much appreciate the read and your kind words.
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lonlyhrtsclub13
Sun, 2018-02-25 07:09
Hi Rula
Such an accurate depiction of what is going on in the world today. You could try eliminating THE and just say party's on. Otherwise, great Sunku
Keep Writing,
Carrie
"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"
Rula
Tue, 2018-02-27 12:04
Thank you Thadear Carrie
For your time. Edits done. Appreciate it.
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lovedly
Sun, 2018-02-25 07:15
when in each para you say ''party is on
coming from you Rula
would be like a paucity
of syllables form
Can I request you to your SUNKU reform
Iriz has take us all up
like a storm
Rula
Tue, 2018-02-27 12:06
Hello loved
Thank you sir for the visit. Hope it flows better now.
Appreciate it.
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IRiz
Sun, 2018-02-25 10:10
Well done
Well done
I love your angry message
It is not only about current events.
To me your sunku is
about how life finds a way to ignore pain when it is not a direct hit and
how inactivity and ignorance makes it worse
IRiz
Rula
Tue, 2018-02-27 12:10
You're spot on
dear. You've read between the lines which few can do.
So grateful for your consistant effort, you have fulfilled all that a workshop might need.
Highly appreciate it dear.
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weirdelf
Mon, 2018-02-26 23:18
pleasing, but not Sunku
https://vocaroo.com/i/s0QLHJdirAUG
cheers,
Jess
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Rula
Tue, 2018-02-27 12:13
Hello jess
Thanks for honoring me with your read.
I wonder what makes you think that it's not a sunku though.
Thank you.
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