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............primi..ordinis........
catcher in the sun
the gleam like shells
falling
brass ignitions
like chinese lanterns
rising
falling wishs
like dead stars
drive about full
the gut tension
glassy
past decorated
houses
brilliant meadows
gathered on tests
beyond the thunder
of the periphery
like tracer sickness
pumping in veined
valleys
burning hot in Love
we need the taste
of heaven
not nicotine
and Zippo fuel
Constantinople
christianity
and pagans
deep in pine forests clutched
on sloped alp sides
christmas bulbs hanging
to the green by pins
while night burns fuel
in static hover dreams
beautiful and technicolour
wisdoms
in the stillness
dog patrol
and snow falls
like a whisper
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Comments
themoonman
Tue, 2013-01-22 03:56
Steven,
I've been wondering about some of the titles you've
been coming up with. I looked this one up and it seems
one is old Italian, primi being the plural of primo, which
has a few definitions but I'm assuming you meant it as
"highly regarded" here. Ordinis; I only found for old religious
orders. Interesting.
Your poem of course is good, while it seems not to fit
together it actually does.
The content is good because it's what you believe, I on the
other hand am an atheist but I'm no hater, most of my family
are Christians so how could I be. If one finds peace in God
then it's fine with me.
thanks for sharing,
Richard
Esker
Tue, 2013-01-22 14:35
order..
you are correct
at the top there is order
people who actually decide this and that
and of course God
I just want catchy titles is all
thank You Richard!