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We Are Born Free

Submitted by Mr joghe on Sat, 2022-10-01 17:36

Stop challenging Africa
Wherever you go we are
We’ve slept on many oceans without a cover
We’ve lived in peril on the sea
We’ve died and buried without a tomb
To remind our children our days
And to celebrate us like heroes.

Stop challenging Africa
We’re born free.

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Geezer

Sun, 2022-10-02 11:06

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Africa, cradle of humanity, born free! Wherever one goes, you are. Not many races can claim with authority that they are everywhere. Maybe someday, the world will validate those claims. Good work, nothing to add nothing to critique. Nice job. ~Geezer.
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Mr joghe

Sun, 2022-10-02 18:21

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