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Going for Broke:
Broke something for my play
It was never perfect anyway
So I reasoned what to say
That no way would I pay
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
The Pottery Barn rule is an American expression alluding to a policy of "you break it, you bought it" or “you break it, you buy it” or "you break it, you remake it", by which a retail store holds a customer responsible for damage done to merchandise on display. Does this only apply to customers (persons) and not to countries?
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Sat, 2018-04-21 19:08
and if OriginalRhyku breaks his own rules
who's gonna pay for that?
I'm going to hold my breath and turn blue till I get my pressie.
cheers,
Jess
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OriginalRhyku
Sat, 2018-04-21 21:22
Weirdelf
Thanks for your review but I am perplexed, which of my rules did I break?
weirdelf
Sat, 2018-04-21 21:28
I thought the rules
for line count and syllables for rhyku were the same as for haiku. You often write that way.
My bad.
[turning bluer]
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
OriginalRhyku
Sun, 2018-04-22 04:24
Weirdelf
As you may have noticed, this is a four line poem that is neither Haiku nor Rhyku - more like a free verse rhyme. Cheers.