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I know nothing of love

I know nothing now
and I knew nothing then
about love and relationships
how they begin, how they end
far be it from me
to start over again
in all of it's agony
love is a trend
a thing briefly passing
just like the wind
your lovers will lie to you
on your knee you will bend
inevitably it comes
to an inglorious end!

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The poem effectively uses repetition to emphasize the speaker's disillusionment with love. The phrase "I know nothing" bookends the poem, reinforcing the speaker's sense of ignorance and helplessness.

However, the poem could benefit from more varied and vivid imagery. The metaphor of love as a passing wind is a common one, and the poem might be more impactful if it offered a unique perspective on love's transience.

The rhythm of the poem is somewhat inconsistent, which can disrupt the reading experience. For example, the line "in all of it's agony" has one more syllable than the lines around it, which can make the poem feel choppy. Consider revising for more consistent rhythm to improve the flow of the poem.

Finally, the poem's tone is consistently pessimistic, which effectively communicates the speaker's negative feelings about love. However, introducing some contrast or complexity into the speaker's perspective could make the poem more engaging and relatable. For example, the speaker could acknowledge some of the positive aspects of love, even as they ultimately conclude that it's not worth the pain.

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In general, you express yourself well, the power seems to come from intimacy with the visions presented. this poem is no different, a strong emotional attack. Pathos flows heavily in this one.
Until "just like the wind" it was a personal opening. But with "your lover's" (not sure about the apostrophe) it becomes general' it speaks of us all, but love does not always fail, there is that small percentage that succeeds. So if you leave always out,( inevitably it comes), there is enough ambiguity for it to succeed. I understand that always is used here to enforce the feeling of lost and hopeless despair, but this tone is quite evident, even without always.

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The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

I agree with your comments, sometimes love does win! Thank you again.

Today never knows what tommorow will bring!

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I agree with your comments, sometimes love does win! Thank you again.

Today never knows what tommorow will bring!

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I agree with your comments, sometimes love does win! Thank you again.

Today never knows what tommorow will bring!

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