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AROUND THE GLOBE
AROUND THE GLOBE
We greet the sun at different times
As our planet turns into the light
And to the new moon, demurred
As I’m waiting for the alarm to ring
A new dawning can bring us hope
When I’m asleep, others are awake
It is time zones for goodness’ sake
But at the poles it’s a slippery slope
Yet communication is everything
As word can be more than a word
Verses translated, for a new insight
As from nature, inspiration climbs
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Thu, 2023-11-09 09:36
My only...
criticism here, is that you have used [But] and [Yet]
in two lines so close together. My choice would be to use [and] instead of [Yet].
~ Geezer.
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