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Dads Love

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2023-03-14 14:08

Yeah my dad loved me
gave away all he had
to other greedy siblings...

left me a life long memory
he comes to me daily
six decades since
kisses me

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
A life long dads memory
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Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-03-14 18:23

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Hello, Lovedly,
I get a mixture of feelings here, but a sweet reflection, too.
Lav

lovedly

Wed, 2023-03-15 01:49

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After posting this small poem my dad came in my dream
He said ''Don't worry...WAIT AND SEE...ENJOY LIFE... ONE DAY IT WILL RAIN GOLD FOR THEE..See my picture this ...But you can't download it ..Be brave as always''
Grand message he is still out there somewhere..... Lav waiting for me .
But I am in no hurry my family is right here with me

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Lavender

Wed, 2023-03-15 08:38

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What a wonderful dream! I'm happy for you, Lovedly.
Lav

lovedly

Wed, 2023-03-15 09:08

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again
indebted to you I remain

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lovedly

Wed, 2023-03-15 09:23

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A fact cannot be declined KINDNESS
EA

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Clentin

Wed, 2023-03-15 12:16

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Good poem. I sense that your siblings seemed to got more response from your father, he seems to be always with you even after his oassing

lovedly

Wed, 2023-03-15 13:25

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so true he died when I was around

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