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Gone from Beauty
I am gone from lasting beauty,
gone from the spiritual height;
and move as a machine moves,
cold, with no baring for right.
I sinned the way a man sins
who's given up spiritual light,
listened to the desires of body
and gave it pleasures to delight.
And all the while, healing of spirit
I ignored, laid in physical grave.
Now eternals disperse from me
to accelerate a deep space run,
I feel I’ve moved at light years
from the protection of my sun.
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Comments
raj
Mon, 2018-05-28 16:14
Hi tyro
innovative poem with innovative expressions. ...do you think pseudo grave could be more appropriate? just a thought
good to see you posting again....
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raj (sublime_ocean)
IRiz
Mon, 2018-05-28 22:01
Hi Tyro,
Hi Tyro,
My wish to your character, sin on but be kind and your sun will return. There is nothing wrong in being yourself. Don't hurt yourself, don't hurt others and live life. Why to poetisize the morbid ideas of sin?
The world is only more miserable because of it.
IRiz
tyro
Tue, 2018-05-29 17:43
thanks raj,but I am trying to
thanks raj,but I am trying to distinguish between the spirit and the body, so that's why I use physical.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commenttyro
Tue, 2018-05-29 17:50
thanks for the reply IRiz,
thanks for the reply IRiz,
but sin is not the point; It is about the danger of choosing exclusively the physical over the spiritual. .
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commentIRiz
Tue, 2018-05-29 20:52
Oh! I did not even know there
Oh! I did not even know there is a choice, just kidding. Thank you for making it clear.
IRiz