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Lament of a Fallen Angel
I once had wings that soared on winds up high
Above the trees and gravity bound feet;
And intimate my soul embraced the sky
To feel the kiss of love where freedom’s sweet.
I moved and soared, on gentleness of air,
A heart that worshiped beauty as its art;
To know of substance, and in knowing share,
And be as one with rhythms of the heart.
But now I know only clay hands, clay feet,
where light is dulled to eyes of traitor's hand
where warmth of heart is shackled in concrete ...
when truer love had forced no harsh command.
Now stamped in time I survive as I must
And see my tears imbue the driest dust.
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Comments
Rula
Thu, 2018-06-21 04:09
A lovely sonnet dear tyro
Well composed I thought. Have stumbled over a few lines which were not pure iamb, but that haven't affected the pleasure of the read.
I don't think you need the comas in the closing couplet, but it's of course up to you.
Enjoyed as always.
Thank you for sharing.
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tyro
Sat, 2018-06-23 09:31
thank you, dear Rula,
thank you, dear Rula,
I agree about the commas, and removed them.
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The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight