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A MESSAGE IN MY DREAMS
As I lay in my bed dreaming, my brother came to me.
We shall speak in the morning, just you wait and see.
He had long been gone, but in the dark I found a trace,
He was hiding in a looking glass, in light his shining grace.
I’m here now sister, lay safe and in your slumber, listen,
I tell my story, with all my love, as I am on a mission,
I’ve come here with a secret, that I have to share.
Let me hold your hand, and touch the silver in your hair.
I’ve brought you a gift, the one you thought was lost,
Irreplaceable and precious, to balance the limitless cost.
He placed it in my hand, in my fist I curled it tight,
And I held it there until I woke, in the morning light.
As I unfurled my fingers, letters spilled into my palm,
Sister dear I love you, this news will hold you warm.
Written in a note, delicate paper floated into flame,
The script spelled out a message in our mother’s name.
I hope this brings you joy, and all happiness you desire,
On the days the breeze is blowing, hear my whispers to inspire.
And butterflies they flutter as your thoughts come to my mind,
I watch you from the distance, my love you will always find.
Her words like heat soothed me, in this fleeting incident,
And there I lay in wonder, of sleeps illusory event.
The ashes in her memory, lay lost on my white soft sheet,
But in tears of joy and sadness, this moment echoes on repeat.
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Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-12-05 09:17
Dear Ruby,
Such a poignant piece. well composed. My favorite lines are:
I’ve brought you a gift, the one you thought was lost,
Irreplaceable and precious, to balance the limitless cost.
He placed it in my hand, in my fist I curled it tight,
And I held it there until I woke, in the morning light.
thank you for sharing this, it is appreciated!
*love & hugs, Cat
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Ruby Lord
Tue, 2023-12-05 11:36
Hi Cat, thank you for your
Hi Cat, thank you for your read and comments and thank you for posting your favourite lines. I always appreciate your comments. Ruby :) xxx
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Lavender
Tue, 2023-12-05 19:10
A Message From My Dream
Hello, Ruby,
Like its beautiful final line, the poem reflects on both joy and sadness. This amazing dream feels like a blessing.
Thank you,
Lx
Ruby Lord
Wed, 2023-12-06 05:24
Thank you Lavender. Sadly no
Thank you Lavender. Sadly no dreams last night but I'll take them whenever they get here. Thank you, Ruby :) xx
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Poetry_thru_a_l...
Wed, 2023-12-27 17:00
Lovely stuff!
My favourite lines are:
As I unfurled my fingers, letters spilled into my palm,
Sister dear I love you, this news will hold you warm.
Ruby Lord
Thu, 2023-12-28 05:34
Thank you for your read and
Thank you for your read and comment, it is much appreciated. Ruby :) xx
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
Leslie
Tue, 2024-01-23 21:25
Ruby
The tŕemor in my hands will not alĺow me to tell you ŵhat I really think,
Hòwever I loved tĥìs one.
Today never knows what tommorow will bring!
Ruby Lord
Wed, 2024-01-24 05:23
If it made your feelings so
If it made your feelings so intense, I think I have achieved what I set out to achieve. When I read this to my auntie, I cried. Ruby :) xx
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Horacio
Mon, 2024-07-15 18:09
Steeped in Love
From beginning to end I feel the love you have for your sister. Love knocks then enters the heart unapologetically...if we allow it. With the exception of a couple of "misplaced 'Ands'" (wink) your poem speaks volumes. Form is always secondary to content and whether or not it elicits an emotion. Yours did.
Ruby Lord
Tue, 2024-07-16 05:04
You are too kind. Thank you
You are too kind. Thank you Horatio for reading and making a comment.
Ruby :) xx
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.