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My Last Ride

Submitted by Kristen H. on Sat, 2024-08-03 16:36

If you hear my exhaust
screaming down the highway
just know

my helmet is catching tears
no pillow will ever know

my engine is feeling pain
I could never tell you about

my gloves are holding me closer
than I'll ever let anyone get again

and if this is my last ride
just know

I loved you until my last breath.

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Sat, 2024-08-03 22:40

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Rula

Sun, 2024-08-04 13:51

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A bitter sweet read. Enjoyable though. Hope it's not the last ride and hope your voice to reach.
Thank you for sharing.

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Kristen H.

Sun, 2024-08-04 14:42

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very much, Rula. This isn't my last, but sometimes... sometimes I wish it could be.

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