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My Mama

Submitted by kowque on Mon, 2024-07-01 01:28

You are that beautiful flower,
I'll never get to smell again.

Black,strong and proud

Not everyone's favourite

And you liked it like that

You liked having only a small number,
Understand your impact.

I got it.

But,I also got hooked

On your essence

And your Aura
And now,that you are gone

All I do is cry.
All I do is look at photos of you, and
Try remember your scent.

It haunts me.

The loss of memory.
Because,
It feels like,
I betray you,
By continuing to exist.

Just,come back.

I'll ask God,
To forgive this instance.
Just this once.
You are worth it

Just come back.

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neopoet

Mon, 2024-07-01 07:30

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kowque

Mon, 2024-07-01 01:29

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I'll edit out the spelling errors soon

Koki

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Leslie

Tue, 2024-07-02 01:52

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All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!

Leslie

Tue, 2024-07-02 04:46

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This was a beautiful tribute. I didn't know your mom had passed away, or was it your grandma. I don't understand why neo
made the comment it did. Your typos were not bad. To me it was fresh. I was much better than what I wrote. I still want to
co-author one with you!

All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!

kowque

Thu, 2024-07-04 04:48

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I'm so sorry for your loss. You are such a feat...I'm sure your loved one is proud of you in every way and force that she continues to exist ❤️

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kowque

Thu, 2024-07-04 04:48

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I'm so sorry for your loss. You are such a feat...I'm sure your loved one is proud of you in every way and force that she continues to exist ❤️

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kowque

Thu, 2024-07-04 04:48

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I'm so sorry for your loss. You are such a feat...I'm sure your loved one is proud of you in every way and force that she continues to exist ❤️

Koki

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Geezer

Tue, 2024-07-02 09:05

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that you will ferret out the slight mistakes of this post and I will not go into them. I lost my mom almost two years ago and it still is fresh. I'm sorry for your loss. ~ Geez.
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kowque

Thu, 2024-07-04 04:46

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Has been giving me issues lately
I'll fix this one when I get my hands on a laptop

However, I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words ❤️

Koki

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kowque

Thu, 2024-07-04 04:46

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Has been giving me issues lately
I'll fix this one when I get my hands on a laptop

However, I appreciate you stopping by and leaving such kind words ❤️

Koki

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kowque

Thu, 2024-07-04 04:51

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The last part of my Comment above was for you.

This site crashed like my mind sometimes.

Thank you

Koki

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