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Oh, To Close My Eyes (Something You Long For?)
Oh, to close my eyes, let me linger there
In the blue-green sea with the rising tides
On the coastal shores sprayed with salty air
Amid vibrant towns, painted mountain sides
Hear the ruins speak of gold deities
Run through poppy fields, red-faced as they blush
Lust for robust wine, pray with Cypress trees
As the church bells nod in a hallowed hush
Let me linger there, feel the ancient sun
Bronze my eager face, kiss the tawny wheat
Rolled between my palms as it's gently spun
I shall linger there, breathe the air so sweet
Stay, Beloved Italy, keep me near
Until your eyes meet mine, I hold you dear
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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
A sonnet for beloved Italy, which I hope to one day meet.
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I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-11-10 10:18
I like this...
Yes, a place to place on your bucket-list. Nicely done! I can almost feel the ancient sun and taste the sparkling wine.
~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Lavender
Thu, 2022-11-10 10:36
Thank you, Geezer,
I always appreciate your comments and thoughts. A sonnet felt like the most befitting rhyme form for precious Italy. Writing it was like a mini-visit for me.
Thanks, again!
L
author commentRosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-11-10 15:32
Superb
I’ve seen these paintings in all the Italian restaurants on the hill in Providence. Great job as usual
Lavender
Thu, 2022-11-10 16:26
Hi, Tim,
Until I actually see Italy for myself, I'll just close my eyes and imagine being there. Thank you for reading!
L
author commentleoferaco
Fri, 2022-11-11 20:57
Very Visual
Hi Lavender,
i found this poem to be very visual. I completely understand your longing for Italy and I think you did a great job expressing it. A line which spoke to me especially was "run through poppy fields, red-faced as they blush." It was able to express a sort of unmatched joy that made me smile while reading it. thank you for sharing
- leo
Lavender
Fri, 2022-11-11 21:09
Hi, Leo,
Many times I close my eyes and let my imagination take me there. Pure joy. Thanks so much for reading and sharing your thoughts. Appreciated!
L
author commentlovedly
Sat, 2022-11-12 04:40
I wonder LAV
Why all first letters in CAPS..
None the less ...
Italy is leg shaped
it boots at all anyway
so enjoy your imaginary visit
hope a poetry field you were looking for
lies in Italy
as a new poetic home
you have found it
good sonnet I/// love em ///can't care less of syllables //but the 14 lines are visible
ababcdcdefef and gg
is all lovedly knows
so now you too know
Lavender
Sat, 2022-11-12 08:20
Hi, Lovedly,
Yes! A sonnet, named after sonneto in Italy, seemed so fitting for a "longing" poem. I used the traditional form - 14 lines, 10 syllables each line, with the abab...rhyme scheme. Thank you for the beautiful wish of a poetry field somewhere in Italy. And thank you, always, for reading and sharing.
L
author commentlovedly
Sun, 2022-11-13 08:58
high Lav
me tnx all ya'll readers of me poetree
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-11-12 14:10
dear Lavender,
I too, long for a place (which I have visited, but remains only an island in time) i knew and loved it with all my being.... now I only find it in my dreams and imagination, for places change in time. I see it longingly in my mind. may you someday see your object of longing in person.
*hugs, Cat
*
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Lavender
Sat, 2022-11-12 14:35
Dear Cat,
Thanks for your kind wishes. Longings are initially hard to put into words, but trying is so revealing and wonderful.
Thank you!
L
Hope you are well! Take good care!
author commentRula
Sat, 2022-11-12 15:21
Stunning!
I adore sonnets and humbly bow for the well structured ones dear L. This is no exception. Bravoooo!
Well done dear
You don't need luck. Tttt his is a winner whatever the judges think:)
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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Lavender
Sat, 2022-11-12 16:32
Hello, Rula!
I'm always happy and grateful when you read and comment. It means so very much to me!
Thank you!
L
author commentAbby
Sun, 2022-11-20 09:48
Good use of imagery here
Good use of imagery here
"To fly is to fall."
Lavender
Sun, 2022-11-20 17:57
Hello, Abby,
Thank you for reading and commenting!
L
author commentlovedly
Thu, 2022-12-01 10:51
Just as I thought
close your eyes
victory is brought
Congrats yeah
I did not FORGOT(forced rhyme) forget not
kick from Italy is now sought
Lav
Lavender
Thu, 2022-12-01 11:13
Hi, Loveldy,
Thank you!
Lav
author commentClentin
Tue, 2023-01-10 07:15
I really liked your poem!
I really liked your poem!
Lavender
Tue, 2023-01-10 09:31
Hello, Clentin,
Thank you very much! I appreciate your comment!
L
author commentLeslie
Sat, 2024-02-10 08:22
Lavender
Your sonnet was so beautiful that It created a coping mechanism in my mind as I read and understood. I collect them and pass them on you know. Look how much beauty and healing you have made possible and I will teach it. there are many
who will benefit. Even if I tell only one person!
All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!
Lavender
Sat, 2024-02-10 14:40
Hello, Leslie,
What a lovely comment... I am very touched.
Thank you!
Lx
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