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Statued before the Sea
I stand before the sea,
the wind from my right,
the sun from my left;
and down the funnel
the sea sings a lullaby...
Oh boundless, boundless,
softly roar if you will
as you light your borders
on the great, wide sky!
Sing, great mother,
sing before me
in love's varied hue.
I close my eyes,
I drift,
I return to you.
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Free verse
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Comments
Geezer
Wed, 2018-07-04 22:18
Those last lines...
make me think of evolution and the fact that life here on Earth began in the ocean and we are called back and fascinated by the sea. Nice simplistic write that gives one pause to think.
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Eumolpus
Wed, 2018-07-04 22:58
I think this is an awesome poem
What a high elevated stance that is personal and giving to the reader. Great words, boundless, boundless....
(Might reconsider the title, a bit of a tongue twister.. )
Very moving poem. inspiring.
Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings
chevyvent
Fri, 2018-07-06 13:34
beautifully written
beautifully written you surprised me a really good writing attempt from your part
lines were formed with the slight of cadence only to get a grip of each flow.
This piece is timeless allowing art to be shown in light of a precious jewel
Loved the way you ended this piece also it really makes one think very great piece intact.
Mario Vitale
lovedly
Fri, 2018-07-06 13:48
And I could imagine standing on the island
where stands the
STATUE of LIBERTY
all lonely
and
now I feel so free
surrounded by the waters
reading your poetry
tyro
Sun, 2018-07-08 09:24
That's a very lovely scene
That's a very lovely scene you have painted there,
Lovedly
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commentraj
Sun, 2018-07-08 06:38
Hi Tyro
the Title of your poem says Statued 'before" Sea therefore I don't think it is about Statue of Liberty...it tells me about the awe in which one is held almost transfixed like a statue from a standpoint on the edge of a sea/ocean....the poem certainly creates a vivid landscape and the thoughts that it inspires...
I am not sure but should it be Oh or just O?
a pleasure read providing great insights..
....................................................................................
raj (sublime_ocean)
tyro
Sun, 2018-07-08 09:10
Thank you, Geezer
Thank you, Geezer
" life here on Earth began in the ocean and we are called back and fascinated by the sea"
Yes, I agree with you, glad you picked up my intention.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commenttyro
Sun, 2018-07-08 09:15
Thank you, Eumolpus
Thank you, Eumolpus
maybe Statued along, what do you think?
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commenttyro
Sun, 2018-07-08 09:22
Thank you very much for your
Thank you very much for your comments, Chevyvent.
they are very clear, well presented, and pertinent.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
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