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When I say I love you
When I say I love you
It is more than just the word,
More than a weak definition,
More than short infatuation.
When I say I love you
It is more than just the word,
More than simply social dress,
Or choosing what suits me best.
When I say I love you
You must never let me go.
Never let me alone my love,
For I have no life without you.
You are more than my completion.
You are more!
It is not that I chose you-
Existence comes before
And if I lose you
Existence is no more
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Thu, 2024-05-30 11:30
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Rula
Thu, 2024-05-30 11:51
Hello dear Tyro
these words would blow away any female.:)
She must be someone special to deserve such a piece of art
The closing lines are especially clever.
Thank you for sharing such enjoying and beautiful piece
Feeling a bit envious though wink wink.
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Geezer
Thu, 2024-05-30 12:38
I truly agree...
with Rula, she has an eye for the romantic story, and you have certainly produced!
I'm not sure that there are many changes that could be made here. I am sure that you could use a different line in the second stanza, rather than: "It is more than just a word". Maybe you could say that it is "more than just a phrase". Nicely done, ~ Geezer.
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tyro
Tue, 2024-06-04 18:19
thank you dear Rula
your reply shows how much you resonated with the poem.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
author commenttyro
Tue, 2024-06-04 18:22
Hi Geezer
I can see the logic in what you say, but I wanted the emphasis to be on the word, Love, not the phrase, I love you.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
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