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Why,why,why?

Submitted by kowque on Fri, 2024-07-26 00:56

Why does your loss
Feel.this
Visceral,
After!
All!
This!
Time!

Let me go.
Leave me be.
Die.
Once.

Not every day.

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neopoet

Fri, 2024-07-26 07:00

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Rula

Fri, 2024-07-26 03:11

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Few words that reflect too much anguish. I can feel the pain.
I thought you may be don't need the period after "be"
I read it like one statement
"Let me go.
Leave me be
Die
Once."
"Visceral " a typo that needs your attention.
Thank you for sharing.

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kowque

Fri, 2024-07-26 12:23

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The typos are an occupational hazard of using English...when it's literally a third language

I'll fix it.

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kowque

Fri, 2024-07-26 21:38

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#MuchLove

Koki

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Lavender

Mon, 2024-07-29 21:41

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Oh, Koki,
This is felt deep in the gut. Nicely done.
Thank you,
L

kowque

Tue, 2024-07-30 03:42

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Thank you

Koki

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