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Angry Senryu
I'm feeling angry
for no apparent reason
so please, fuck right off
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
oh dear I am in a bad mood ;) rrraaaaaarrrr got to let it out somewhere though eh? hoping to transform it into joy eventually :)
Editing stage:
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Comments
raj
Wed, 2011-02-09 13:32
Dear Beki..
i liked the forthrightness of this haiku...hitting the nail right on its head....
much love..
raj (sublime_ocean)
faerybeki
Wed, 2011-02-09 13:53
Thanks raj, wasn't sure how
Thanks raj, wasn't sure how it would go down, just needed to get it out :) much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
Blue_Halcyon
Wed, 2011-02-09 13:42
Peeks over the back of the couch
Should I dare mention this would actually be a senryu. If not - I'll just stay back here out of sight. ;-)
It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry
faerybeki
Wed, 2011-02-09 13:57
lol :) and thanks for
lol :) and thanks for pointing that out, I did wonder :) title changed ,you can come out from behind the sofa now, much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
Kailashana2
Wed, 2011-02-09 14:01
Well I say *uck you
Well I say *uck you
and your little doggie too,
love, the wicked witch
Is this a senyru or a haiku?
Oh, something wicked this way comes and it's heading straight for you: A BAD POEM!
Batten down the hatches! Bring out the cruicifix, holy water and the picture post cards,
it's time for an exorcism. ;-)
~A
faerybeki
Wed, 2011-02-09 18:03
Are we not in Kansas anymore?
Are we not in Kansas anymore? ;) much love Beki xxx ps maybe it's a hybrid x
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
scribbler
Wed, 2011-02-09 14:04
lol
better pissed off than pissed on lol...................scribbler
faerybeki
Wed, 2011-02-09 18:03
indeed, scribbler, indeed :)
indeed, scribbler, indeed :) much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)
Race_9togo
Wed, 2011-02-09 21:15
Beki
LMAO
"so, please, fuck right off!"
I love this line.
Sweet Lady, be angry more often, this is worth it!
LOL
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
faerybeki
Thu, 2011-02-10 04:45
Thanks Jim, but I'm not so
Thanks Jim, but I'm not so sure, I don't think it suits me :) much love Beki xxx
'God turns you from one feeling to another
and teaches by means of opposites,
so that you will have two wings to fly,
not one.' (...Rumi)