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WHEN ALL THE BIRDS HAVE FLOWN
When all the birds have flown,
remains their song.
Among the pebbles in the brook,
along the branches green,
through gaps in forest trees.
The sky, its bugle blue,
the shaking raindrops oscillate
to hit the ground,
resound with little thuds
on trodden leaves.
Within this peace,
the memory of many things throng,
we start to dream of spring,
and all that's sad is gone.
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Free verse
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Comments
Seren
Tue, 2013-10-29 07:33
Ann
That ending is just perfect it made me take a breath there's so much to like about this poem you paint the picture so beautifully
and all that's sad is gone.
and that last line is just brilliant its lovely to be reading you again, I've been away busy with life its nice to be back and reading everyone again :)
love and hugs JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Tue, 2013-10-29 17:22
Hi Ann
I'd already read this over at Dan's place but it's good enough to read yet again lol..........stan
Roscoe Lane
Wed, 2013-10-30 02:14
Beautiful,
Beautiful, it's not quite winter, and you've got me wanting spring. Love Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
Nordic cloud
Wed, 2013-10-30 08:28
Thank you all, Jayne good to
Thank you all, Jayne good to see you too, I am partly back, still convalescing but doing fine. Its damnable being a semi invalid, when I love to walk long distances in the wilds, but slowly I shall do so again I'm sure of it. Three times, I am glad I am not a cat with NINE lives to live!! Hopefully.
I think of Spring in this Autumn due also to how I am...glad you want the Spring Roscoe, but I love the Winter too, those silent white scenes with falling snow are pure magic.
Love from 1/2 Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
mand
Wed, 2013-10-30 13:23
I'm so excited
When all the birds have flown,
remains their song.
Among the pebbles in the brook,
along the branches green,
through gaps in forest trees.
It's so good to be reading Your's and JC poems.
Both of you have this kinda aura! - an almost magical feel about your poetry.
The sky, its bugle blue,
the shaking raindrops oscillate
to hit the ground,
resound with little thuds
on trodden leaves. This stanza is stunningly descriptive!
Within this peace,
the memory of many things throng,
we start to dream of spring,
and all that's sad is gone. This stanza is reflective and positive.
Keep writing Ann! You poems inspire and infuse.
Love Mand xxxx
Nordic cloud
Fri, 2013-11-01 12:11
Thank you dear mand, you know
Thank you dear mand, you know the woods as I do,
remember when we went to the big estate that evening,
there it was so atmospheric wasn't it, so I know that you
understand my poetry as you too watch nature like me.
Love Ann
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
mand
Fri, 2013-11-01 12:52
I remember! Gelliur - The
I remember! Gelliur - The old mansion has been bought by a private owner. It is currently being done up, so no one is able to visit. I spent many a wonderful summer evening walking round the mansion grounds. Fabulous.
Good memories!
Your poems do nature great justice.
Love Mand xxxxx
loved
Mon, 2013-11-04 21:46
When all the birds have flown, ...remains their song.
When all the birds have flown,
remains their song
but you are not left alone
younger kids join in to read
what in spring one has sown
and
a dream we harvest....
ere tis autumn
and all bygones are by gones
strength within 1940 born...
is reborn
and
the pen strikers continue to remain on
yet as powerful
if not more
so you too must carry on...
Regards ma'am
loved
Nordic cloud
Wed, 2013-11-06 13:19
A lovely comment, thank you
A lovely comment, thank you thank you,
From Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
loved
Wed, 2013-11-06 16:19
get well soon friend...
you were the first one
who read me ma'am
and
so I regard you as the top one
on Neopoets
who held a non poet's
poetic hand
loved
Nordic cloud
Sun, 2013-11-17 15:29
Doing my best, have to have a
Doing my best, have to have a tight stocking put on and taken off by nurses every day and night, amusing, it will pass ' as the fox said as he was skinned!' I take day at a time, living in the present, have no pain, what more can one ask.
Love Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
Ian.T
Tue, 2013-11-05 04:41
Lady of the Northern Skies
You will never be less, your physical being cannot change the way you are in your Spirit.
You are free to roam
though you sit at home
Where those birds
have gone you see
They can be held
in your minds Eye
Just learn to roam free
Yours as always, Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Nordic cloud
Wed, 2013-11-06 13:18
I am free, free of past and
I am free, free of past and future, I live in the now of life
and cannot therefore be bored, or tongue-tied either!!!!
Thank you Ian.
Love Ann
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.