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Him
At first, it was your smile, I was lost wondering how beautiful it shone and lit up the room.
In denial, you gave me warmth when I was blue, The scent of flowers all over you seemed bliss, and The daydream I hated became me.
You were my daydream.
Acceptance, I laughed at a fairytale, A knife in my thighs reminded me that you were only the sun.
As you lit up you set rather too soon.
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Thu, 2023-12-07 20:00
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