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The mistress called I
Just another argument,
Just another day,
Bottle of gin beside me,
Trying to find a better way,
Out of here,
To get things clear.
Away from the head#$@%,
The lies,
And heartbreak.
What you said,
Was it really meant?
Or was it all just a fake?
A comfortable deception?
But convienent to who?
A miscalculated perception?
But from what point of view?
I think of you,
To us this is nothing new.
But as we tear each other apart,
Ourselves we fade away.
I lie here crying,
While you rented your wife and kids today.
Soft words and empty kisses,
Momentarily meet your demands.
But God's rose petal ice cream,
Sure melts slowly in your hands.
Doesn't she?
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words:
I wrote this poem about my ex husband Adrian. Who was married when we met. It's true to say that when the mistress becomes the wife you create a vacancy!
He ripped my heart out of my chest and stomped on it ! He toyed with me and enjoyed my pain. And his then wife was a religious freak who told him I was a witch and I had put a spell on him to make him leave her!
I was so mad when I wrote this!
It's had a lot of titles:
Adrian the affair
You and me
Headf#$% central
But recently I've settled with "the mistress called I"
Editing stage:
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Comments
lovedly
Thu, 2018-05-10 21:44
good name
Oscar was Wilde
a Libra too
A wonderful poet
all knew
The Eccentric poet
Fri, 2018-05-11 06:12
Eh?
What has this comment got to do with my poem?
lovedly
Fri, 2018-05-11 13:14
I read your bio
and
these words thereafter from my mind did flow
if you say I'd let them go
and
let em down the THAMES
FLOW
only if you want it so!!!!
I'll delete this one also
just say so....
The Eccentric poet
Fri, 2018-05-11 18:27
Apologies
I was confused sorry about that lol
tyro
Fri, 2018-05-11 04:51
I like this because I can
I like this because I can feel the pull of strong emotion; but that being said, I feel the use of rhyme waters down the intensity of your feeling.
I found BPD very intriguing
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
The Eccentric poet
Fri, 2018-05-11 06:11
Thankyou
Thankyou for your input