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Little Dieties

Snow began to fall in sheets,
thick snow, flying furiously.
Blown in by a whirlwind,
a roiling ocean of snow,
swarming snowflakes
hurried along by the bountiful breeze
flying like ashes
from a pyre released.

As long shadows slithered
slowly up the snow,
the gray shifting shrouds
assumed a solid shape.

Gliding across the snow
with graceful dancer's steps,
little deities disgorged
like cargo from confectionary ships.

Thrashing about in
snow sprinkled shrubs,
their tiny steps crunching
in snow frozen sand
and snow-covered paths
pocked by prowling wolf paws
who's pale, predator eyes,
snow pearls in moonlight,
wait patiently in a pack,

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Structured: Western
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Comments

I really love it all. I really like the title. The whole thing has a language of mystique about it.

Excellent,
Tim

Thank you Tim for your kind words. This one was fun to write.

author comment

kaleidoscope of words and ess-sounds to keep the ear listening! I am impressed at the coherence conveyed. The title word is a typo. [Little Deities] ~ Geezer.
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It is a pleasure to read the insightful comments from the readers. Please pardon my typo. I should be more careful.

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fix it! ~ Geezer.
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