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Trinity River Days
The old miner, who’d been in the back hills
for some time, hailed our small camp.
Best to announce yourself when you’re in gold country.
Firearms, gold, the dark and surprises are a risky mix there.
His friendly manner, great stories and good humor
put us at ease, earning him an offer of a spot for the night
to sleep away the whisky we kept pouring.
With first light the next morning
we discovered the old man was gone,
along with a small amount of our food.
The fare for his company, we supposed.
I remember all of us being comforted
because he hadn’t pilfered the bacon.
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My best friend asked if I wanted to help his brother with some mining in NoCal. Being very young at the time, I said let's do it! Quite an adventure, to be sure!
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Comments
Leslie
Thu, 2024-09-19 09:25
Trinity River Days
A very interesting writing. I can feel the scene, great job. Glad he didn't get the bacon.
Today never knows what tommorow will bring!
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2024-09-22 10:58
Don't mess with the bacon -
Don't mess with the bacon - LOL! Thanks for commenting Lelie.
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Michael Anthony
Lavender
Thu, 2024-09-19 09:46
Trinity River Days
Hello, Michael,
Sometimes people we come across in life by chance leave lasting memories and impressions. This felt like a significant moment. I'm wondering if there are more moments to the "Trinity River Days." Feels like an important time period in your life.
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2024-09-22 10:59
Thanks L! There are other
Thanks L! There are other stories from this time, very long ago, and I hope to get to them soon.
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Michael Anthony
Candlewitch
Thu, 2024-09-19 09:53
Dear Michael,
a marvelous engaging tale. I would love to read more...
*hugs, Cat
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Michael Anthony
Sun, 2024-09-22 11:00
Thank you Cat! I do have a
Thank you Cat! I do have a few more stories in mind from this period of my life. Hope to get to them soon...
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Michael Anthony