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What's Life About?
Step out the door to clear the doubt.
You'll learn for sure what life's about.
What's good, what's bad go out, explore,
to clear the doubt, step out the door.
Unlatch the lock, cast out the fear.
find out your way through hope and cheer.
The journey is a joyful walk,
Cast out the fear, unlatch the lock.
The secrets lie upon your palms.
Feel free to share your heartfelt psalms
Enhance your wits, give it a try
Upon your palms the secrets lie.
Have self esteem, respect the old.
Find out the way , be strong and bold.
Be nice and kind to those in need.
Respect the old, have self esteem.
Knock hard to learn what, where and why.
Detect the world with naked eye.
It doesn't lie, but helps you gain.
What, where and why, knock hard to learn.
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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neopoet
Sun, 2024-09-15 22:10
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "What's Life About?" effectively uses a structured rhyme scheme and repetition to convey its message. The repetition of phrases at the beginning and end of each stanza creates a cyclical effect, reinforcing the idea of a journey or exploration.
However, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery. While the general themes of exploration, learning, and personal growth are clear, the poem could be more engaging if it included more detailed descriptions or examples. For instance, instead of saying "Detect the world with naked eye," the poem could describe a specific scene or object that the speaker observes.
The poem also tends to tell the reader what to do or feel, rather than showing through action or description. For example, "Be nice and kind to those in need" could be shown through a specific act of kindness. This would make the poem more vivid and engaging.
Lastly, the poem could benefit from varying the rhythm or meter. While the consistent rhythm gives the poem a steady pace, varying the rhythm could add interest and better convey the ups and downs of the journey that the poem describes.
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Triskelion
Sun, 2024-09-15 20:07
Hi Rula..
...I liked the pace in this educational rap(ish) piece and the in-mix of internal rhymes. Thats a first for me with the swap bit in there. Pretty cool.
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Rula
Mon, 2024-09-16 03:37
Hello Thomas
My pleasure to introduce a new form of poetry to a talented poet like yourself. It adds to my happiness knowing that it appealed to you.
I v. Much appreciate your kind visit sir.
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author commentLavender
Tue, 2024-09-17 10:02
What's Life About?
Hello, Rula,
An energetic poem! The lovely rhythm and rhyme added to its enthusiasm. I enjoyed the Swap Quatrain, too! Thank you!
Lx