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Digital Drugs
Digital drugs are becoming the dread
that fears the world, youth are dead
with beats and sounds
that cost but pounds
the venom drone, on and on, fast spread.
To learn more:
http://www.wired.com/2010/07/digital-drugs/
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Rula
Tue, 2014-11-04 13:18
Thank you
Spot on. Edited accordingly.
Appreciate the visit and the comment.
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alidzain
Tue, 2014-11-04 13:56
Salaam, Rula
Interesting concept but I still don't understand what do you mean by "digital drugs". Care to elaborate?
Alid
Rula
Tue, 2014-11-04 14:03
Salaam Khalid
this is a new kind of drugs. I have added a link for more information. VERY dangerous.
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alidzain
Tue, 2014-11-04 14:54
Shukran Rula
I didn't even know it existed till now.
Alid
Rula
Tue, 2014-11-04 15:00
So I hope
it's not only a serious limerick, but an eye opener too.
I missed you. Where have you been. Hope all is well brother.
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alidzain
Tue, 2014-11-04 16:14
I'm here and there, sister
Kinda busy after some unexpected happenings but I did post some poetry here. The latest is "Breaking Free", its about freeing oneself from hypocrisy.
Alid
wesley snow
Tue, 2014-11-04 15:52
I suffer withdrawal from my digital drugs all the time.
The damn computers keep breaking or at the very least behaving as if possessed.
MOG! You can run, but... I'll hunt to the ends of the Earth.
The poem's subject is relevant, so it certainly qualifies as serious, but I'm not convinced I hear a limerick in the rhythm.
W. H. Snow
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Rula
Wed, 2014-11-05 04:00
positive
it is not the typical meter of the limerick, but I heard jess saying he's only talking about meter if it's jarring, thus I hope content is what he is after.
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wesley snow
Wed, 2014-11-05 17:15
I am so out of my depth here it's not funny.
I cannot use this rhythm to write anything of serious worth. It makes me laugh only, even when I try serious subjects.
The Holocaust, Aids, Climate Change, bad poetry, you should hear the guffaws.
W. H. Snow
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Ian.T
Tue, 2014-11-04 18:40
Rula
I am quite close to making this limerick thing,
Yours it near to the write way but here I will say:-
The typical rhythm of a limerick is like this:-
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH
bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH bah-bah-BAH.
bah = delicate syllable.. BAH= hard syllable..
Is the right way,
maybe the sheep know better,
still I shall try harder with my letter.
Yours J Sparrow
("John" not Jack this time the four or five of us are doing fine.lol)
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
wesley snow
Tue, 2014-11-04 20:24
Sit down.
The meter is catalyctic anapest with judicious use of iambs here and there. A little bit of messing it about is okay, but to change the meter you described with your bahs is to be abhorred. It's a little like the riddle game. Cheating is against the rules even for cheaters.
W. H. Snow
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