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A Baby's Prayer
Bless the mothers and praise their charms
I found "me" in mama's arms
Always safe, always sound
Always honoured with that bound
Graceful, delicate, almost silk
Bless all mothers of mama's ilk
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c lynn brooks
Tue, 2020-05-12 10:07
Rula
Your poem had me in tears. so soft and tender I still miss my mom and more than likely always will
thank you for this lovely poem
Chrys
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Rula
Tue, 2020-05-12 13:19
Dear chrys
What more would a poet wish. Bless you and your mother
Thank you for reading
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Rula
Tue, 2020-05-12 13:25
Dear teddy
Thank you for your kind visit.
I never knew that ilk has a negative meaning. My dictionary doesn't mention any negative use
Here what I find:
ilk 1
— noun
family, class, or kind:
he and all his ilk.
— adjective
same .
— Idioms
of that ilk ,
(in Scotland) of the same family name or place:
Ross of that ilk, i.e., Ross of Ross.
of the same class or kind.
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Rula
Wed, 2020-05-13 10:12
Wow
Thank you. You've said pretty much in this one line Jerry.
Highly appreciate your kind visit.
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lovedly
Wed, 2020-05-13 12:24
just beautiful that's why I see my mom still***
***Did you read my poem
MOM'S SMILES
''''''''''Bless the mothers and praise their charms
I found "me" in mama's arms(((WHY ME IN INVERTED COMMAS Rula???)
Always safe, always sound
Always honoured with that bound
Graceful, delicate, almost silk
Bless all mothers of mama's ilk
Rula
Wed, 2020-05-13 16:06
Thank you loved
I thought "myself" is grammatically more correct, but as the speaker is a baby, hence comes the quotation marks.
Thanks for the kind visit.
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