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Approximate Fool
Love might have been there somewhere.
In between your elsewhere days.
But you made me guess
most of the time. I resented you for it.
And I was terrible at both.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words:
I love how poetry can condense feelings and experiences that took so much time to sort out into such a short poem.
Editing stage:
Contest:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Ruby Lord
Thu, 2023-12-21 06:29
Ouch and wow at the same time
Ouch and wow at the same time. Yes, you've condensed your experiences here and folded them into a small but powerful poem. It made me sit up and take notice of each word. Well done. Ruby :) xx
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-12-23 10:50
Ouch - Exactly how it felt
Ouch - Exactly how it felt writing this one Ruby, thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one.
Best
Michael Anthony
Geezer
Thu, 2023-12-21 12:17
Wow...
A masterpiece of condensation, a perfect picture of a page from someone's diary. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-12-23 10:51
"Diary page" - I like that
"Diary page" - I like that Geez! Thanks for stopping by.
Best
Michael Anthony
Lavender
Thu, 2023-12-21 19:15
Approximate Fool
Hello, Michael,
The torment of the journey and the spark of realization all in one. I agree, well done.
L
Michael Anthony
Sat, 2023-12-23 10:52
Thank you L! Always
Thank you L! Always appreciate your visits.
Best
Michael Anthony