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Broken Air Condition

Submitted by Kristen H. on Thu, 2024-08-08 20:44

We never had much more than each other
in the summer of 2016

Adventures on Saturday nights
Two wheels
Two helmets
Two hearts

Lazy Sunday mornings
Two cups of coffee
Two cigarettes burned
Two hands together

There wasn’t much to it
Just you and I,
and our broken air conditioner

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Contest:

08/24 Broken Air Condition

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

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Fri, 2024-08-09 02:50

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Leslie

Fri, 2024-08-09 07:37

Kristen

I enjoyed this it gave me hope that maybe there will also be a day like this for me.

All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!

Kristen H.

Fri, 2024-08-09 21:14

Thank you

I wish this for everyone!

author comment

Rula

Fri, 2024-08-09 09:16

Simply awesome!

And right to the point!
Best wishes

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Kristen H.

Fri, 2024-08-09 21:14

Thank you

very much, Rula!

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Lavender

Fri, 2024-08-09 22:23