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Mountain Cattle
Let me explain the title -
Mountain cattle = Highland cows
Scottish vernacular; cow = coo
Coos on mountain side = high coos
Fresh snowdrops shiver.
North wind rages at new growth;
Not yet time for spring.
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Kailashana2
Wed, 2011-02-09 08:03
This is too coo.............l
This is too coo.............l!
Submit it somewhere, please!
~A
Tam the Chanter
Wed, 2011-02-09 10:44
high coos
Its bloody cool all right, up in the highlands in winter!
Glad you enjoyed. Where do I submit these ravings?
Love
Ian xx
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Pugilist
Wed, 2011-02-09 11:21
It took me a moment
My mind is wandering this morning so I did not put the title and the vernacular together at first.
Then I read the explanation aloud and chuckled.
As far as the poem, well done.
The first line is striking and sets a good tone and the use of "rages" in the second line is spot on. The only suggestion I have for the poem at this time is the consideration of a semi-colon at the end of line 2 rather than a period to create a pause rather than a stop.
As far as the title, I like Mountain Cattle but you might want to try out your "High Coos" to see how it plays.
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Jonathan Moore
Tam the Chanter
Wed, 2011-02-09 13:54
coos
Just some more of my convoluted attempts to be amusing, Jonathan, glad it gave you a laugh.
I agreee with your punctuation suggestion. Good to see you again, still have plans for Irish tour?
Regards
Ian
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA
Pugilist
Wed, 2011-02-09 14:58
Irish Tour
I do, but they have been delayed a year so I am looking at 2012.
Unless, of course, my books sell millions of copies and Top Gear or Graham Norton flies me over to be on a show.
That's more of a dream than an expectation, especially a lap around the track in a reasonably priced car.
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Jonathan Moore
Race_9togo
Wed, 2011-02-09 22:45
lol
"coo" is "a dog" in scots gaelic! (cu)...
thus
"Stoned dog"
But I feel you, lol.
The old men used to say
"Hi coos ower yon brae"
LOL
very funny, Tam!
I do like your "mountain cattle". You capture the end of scottish winter very well.
Respectfully, Race
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Tam the Chanter
Thu, 2011-02-10 12:32
coos
My grannie used to recite a children's ditty which went :
Looky ! looky ! Dere De Go !
Forty buses in a row !
'Em no buses - 'em are trucks !
See whits in 'em !
Coos an' ducks !
Oh, for those long - lost days steeped in the great culture. LOL
Glad you enjoyed, Jim
Ian
TIME FLIES LIKE AN ARROW, BUT FRUIT FLIES LIKE A BANANA