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Untitled
smiling rays,
i drop a cliff note on
perspective and changing
frames hanging
pieces by the
letter falling
closer in the
midst of post-
daylight frequencies
onlooking longer
at the clamoring
daydreams soft
spoken screeches
and bellowing
whispers in pre-
starlit afterthoughts
wild and transparent
deciding days of
ornamental life
trying for
places stuck in
waysides bending
though cul-de-sac
entryways ending in
authentic life
Style / type:
Free verse
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Comments
Rula
Fri, 2014-08-08 10:09
Hello,
I read this many times but hardly could get any message.
I would recommend a title, even if a temporary one, and line breaking if you care enough to convey a message dear Shamoneness.
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