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All Too Common
a muggy night
scent of sweat
stultifying
she clamors
head in hands
of fools and attitudes
always
her discomfort sets the mood
poor susceptible
princess pea
seems all the world's
a briar patch
and she
with no shoes
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Comments
Rottiestyl
Sun, 2011-05-22 19:38
Can feel the irony in this
Can feel the irony in this one.
seems all the world's
a briar patch
and she
with no shoes
what a great stanza. No hidden meaning here just a clear shot in the face of a hard to plow road. I really enjoyed it.
Rottie - Kim
(V)
Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.
By: K. Mulroney
" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."
Kailashana2
Sun, 2011-05-22 21:18
feeling.....black and blue...
feeling.....black and blue....perhaps she and I are sole mates. ;-)
~A
Janice Pearce
Mon, 2011-05-23 10:13
All Too Common
Loved this one from you!! Thanks for sharing, and I too loved that last stanza~