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angry fish
your eyes and mouth
don't match
it gave you
an off-centered
look
we argued
made up
made love
walked in storms
dripped rain
made love again
discussed my country
falling into the ocean
your room was beautiful
i forgot his face there
guilt came after we ended
although i never thought
an explanation was needed
i am filled with ghosts
yours and mine
i have opinions on
the death of death
and love, if
that's what we had
your eyes and mouth
are still out of kilter but
i consider you
the finest month
i ever lived
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Rottiestyl
Thu, 2011-06-09 02:36
i have opinions on
i have opinions on
the death of death
loved this CC. This was an excellent piece. Perfect depiction of a quickie affair and the memories (ghosts) that follow behind us even years after it;s over. Sometimes, it ends being the biggest love affair in a life time. Loved this, very descriptive work.
K. Mulroney
Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.
By: K. Mulroney
" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."
CCfire
Thu, 2011-06-09 03:27
Thanks K, yeah it can prove
Thanks K, yeah it can prove the only one you will ever remember this vividly.
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
loved
Thu, 2011-06-09 10:34
your excellence makes me bask under the shade of ur excellence
your room was beautiful
i forgot his face there
guilt came after we ended
although i never thought
an explanation was needed
loved
loved
Thu, 2011-06-09 10:34
your excellence makes me bask under the shade of ur excellence
your room was beautiful
i forgot his face there
guilt came after we ended
although i never thought
an explanation was needed
loved
CCfire
Fri, 2011-06-10 00:33
thank you loved
times two lol...<3
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
Kailashana2
Thu, 2011-06-09 11:56
I read this one to Barry
I read this one to Barry yesterday (he's the poet I met here & now live with & a sometime-muse). He said, and I quote him: Mmmmmmmmmmmm. For him that's a lot.
The *finest month I ever lived* reminds me of an old movie called *Sweet November*, remade a decade ago with Keanu Reeves, Charlize Theron (I enjoyed both versions, guess I qualify for the WSMLA*)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7GrK5THh9_k
Angry Fish! I have to say the words: fucking brilliant.
~A
*weepy sentimental movie lover award
loved
Thu, 2011-06-09 13:01
PARDON my intrusion
is Barry a libra or too egoistic sun leo!!
only for my information please.
THANKS
loved
Kailashana2
Thu, 2011-06-09 13:41
He/s 2/5 and I'm 9/22. Does
He/s 2/5 and I'm 9/22. Does that help? Your welcome Rosie :-)
~A
CCfire
Fri, 2011-06-10 00:30
Tell Barry I am glad he said
Tell Barry I am glad he said something then :) I did think the title suited it lol but you'd have to know the person I am talking about I think to get the full story and I might keep it for another poem lol
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche