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KORRECSHUN
where the dusk burns like a winter ember
and clouds roll like duststorms
I strove away from you
this livid heart aflame
keeping the passion
enclosed in a fist of ache
but you escaped with a mirthful
sigh and melted the stolid
weight of magic you encase
me in
turn me towards you
let me not bare my back
but look upon the sweet
fair being you tease me
with you tempt me with
you love me with
and I shall give you longing
and passion
let our ghosts be a treasure
to each like heart halves
forged
all the waves shall be
love letters cast from shore
to shore
for I'll forever be yours
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Comments
Esker
Wed, 2011-08-17 14:45
admission of guilt
guilty for want
for need..
For a Mermaid dear......
Geezer
Wed, 2011-08-17 19:30
Steven...
Once again, you write like you used to! I read this poem over a few times, just wanting to absorb it, and maybe be able to recite it in time of need. LOL "This livid heart aflame, keeping the passion enclosed in a fist of ache!" What a magnificent line! ~ Gee
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lou
Thu, 2011-08-18 04:27
Hi
I admire your work a great deal, I can not fault this one. My favourite Stanza is the first one.I love the way that you construct your poems.
Lou
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Esker
Fri, 2011-09-16 00:43
captivate
construct
captive..but to hold beauty and defined object of adoration
like a cage for aviary
or the marble wealth for the spirit of love loss the quest of
immortality of souls expatriated
the careful sceince of balance action and delight
Poetry is a daring and careful object and subject
thank you Lou