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STOLEN GLANCES
Bar me not from gazing on
the form which sets my blood on fire
and has done so for many a year.
Don't reward my gaze with flippant ire
in attempt to quash growing desire.
That mirror you depend on so
only shows a flawed reflection.
It never shows what I behold
when I chance to look in your direction,
stealing a glance of near perfection.
So sit there with your puzzle book.
I'll sit here with note pad on my knee.
With pen in hand and love in heart
let me describe what most don't see
and put it into poetry.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments
scribbler
Mon, 2011-08-29 11:59
Ho Rose
Sometimes I'll be sitting around with Susan while she's working on a puzzle of some type and I get caught staring at her . I then get told to stop that lol. This poem is the result...........stan
scribbler
Mon, 2011-08-29 14:54
Hi Rose
Once a poem hits the stream it no longer belongs to the writer and will be interpreted in any way the reader pleases lol. this is as should be. I just put my intent in case you had completely missed my meaning, should have known better..........stan
loved
Mon, 2011-08-29 12:12
A lady poet was recently asked
Future Poet
A lady poet was recently asked
How she managed
To be able to publish her book of poetry
She replied
When I was ten, getting bored,
My mom asked me not to idle,
Then what should I do she asked,
Write a poem
Thereafter she never stopped
And
Today she has published her book of poems
And
Her mom is her publisher, editor and reader.
Best of luck to you,
You are the future potential
Of all poets here
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2011-08-29 14:55
hi loved
I hope Neo can do better than vest future potential in me lol. Thanks for the read and kind comment...........stan
loved
Mon, 2011-08-29 22:14
ue not the future
uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr the presenttttttttttttt
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2011-08-29 22:48
lol
That would be even worse lmao...............stan
loved
Tue, 2011-08-30 08:44
one small addition
don't steal
but STEEL ..
those lovely glances
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2011-08-29 22:51
Hi Eph
Thank you for coming by and leaving such kind comment. I will give your suggestion serious consideration when I inevitably edit..................stan
scribbler
Tue, 2011-08-30 08:30
Hmm....
I guess it's a good thing when somebody thinks enough of a work to come back with another read and suggestion. Thank you...........stan
lou
Tue, 2011-08-30 05:53
Stan
Let the critique police hunt me down LOL!!
It was simply beautiful
Love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
scribbler
Tue, 2011-08-30 07:35
hi lou
There is a warrant out on you lol. Thank you for your kind comment...................stan
scribbler
Wed, 2011-09-21 08:19
Hi Rose
See, I Do use suggestions sometimes lol.............stan
Kailashana2
Wed, 2011-09-21 09:44
Hi Stan.
Hi Stan.
Poetry is a lover's book of reference....love speaks. It warms my heart to hear your words of love for the woman you married. I'm not that lucky, but I'm fortunate. ;-) .
Much enjoyed this whole thread. Thank you.
~A
scribbler
Wed, 2011-09-21 10:20
Hi Anna
I guess the lucky one is Me...............stan
scribbler
Wed, 2011-09-21 18:14
hi Ian
Thank you, but I can't promise no changes as I'm always tinkering with my stuff. Indeed, a one word change is what brought this poem back to top of stream lol.......stan
scribbler
Wed, 2011-09-21 18:15
hi Lonnie
Thank you for the time to read and leave such kind comment...........stan
wesley snow
Wed, 2011-09-21 17:36
Hey Stan,
I liked this. Not that you needed my comment. You're loaded with fans here.
I still (of course) would have liked a more even meter, but the sum of the poem was comfortable and lovely.
wesley
W. H. Snow
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scribbler
Wed, 2011-09-21 18:20
hi Wes
I'm pleased you enjoyed this. I am not too well versed in technical aspects of poetry yet, so meter slips are probably rampant in most of my stuff. And that also begs the question : Which is more important the ease of read and message delivery, or maintaining strict meter? The masters manage both, but this neophyte only gets it right occassionaly lol...............stan
scribbler
Wed, 2011-09-21 22:15
hi
Thank you Chrys................stan
loved
Wed, 2012-10-24 04:12
AFTER A long time in search of my roses poems
i came across yours Stan
and also found one of my own
shall post it soon
if 24 hours
are not still due
loved
Ian.T
Wed, 2012-10-24 04:20
Stan
To see a rose with feelings
to look at the inside
where the feelings are held tightly
before age unfurls the bloom
Is a beauty that many need
Susan is blessed that you see her so.
This is True Love,
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Wed, 2012-10-24 04:28
To see a rose with feelings
how true r u
loved
scribbler
Wed, 2012-10-24 13:20
Hi Ian and loved
Hard to believe this oldie was dug back up lol. Thanks for resurrecting it.................stan
loved
Thu, 2012-10-25 00:00
At times once u dig
u get something unexpected so its a gift
loved
scribbler
Thu, 2012-10-25 10:39
hi loved
Guess you're just lucky you didn't hit a sewer when you were digging lol.............stan
Ian.T
Thu, 2012-10-25 13:46
Stan
They found a king under a car park in Leicester City a few weeks ago.
(Richard the Third).. I think they are now looking for his car but they don't know where to bury him.
My kingdom ended in a car park for the want of a horse of course LMAO
Keep Digging Y'All,
Love you all still, Yours Sparrow
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Ian.T
Thu, 2012-10-25 03:30
Stan
Do you think this is now a memorable Poem lol, Take care and keep writing, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Thu, 2012-10-25 10:39
hi Ian
Almost lmao...................stan