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Waratah Nights

Submitted by Seren1 on Sun, 2011-10-16 08:58

I sit in the dark, as far off
the scent of Waratah wafts
reminding me of you,

my mouth curves
a memory, as my face tilts
the moon, her red veils
run up my chest

faraway down the road
we may meet again
across a canyon of time,

our eyes will connect

I often wonder what yours
will dare tell me,
at the first dawning
will a ray of remembrance
burst through your iris

or will our words of anger
sour every glance,
turning those blue eyes
opaque

I live in wonder,
I breath forgiveness
and only god knows
who you are anymore

but the waratah, ever blooms
of you and sickle moons
in my smiles

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I am naughty should be in bed but I decided to post just one more before I go tomorrow ... will catch up with you all sooner rather than later ... love x x x
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft

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Candlewitch

Sun, 2011-10-16 09:07

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Sublime, is the only word I can think of to describe your poem! I hung on every word!

my mouth curves
a memory, as my face tilts
the moon, her red veils
run up my chest

Love, Cat

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