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WHIRLWIND'S HARVEST ( an exercise for all)
Hi ya'll. While I'm taking a break I thought I'd give everybody some thing to play with. I'll start the poem. Only 2 rules :1. post only one stanza 2. stanza doesn't need to rhyme but it must have rhythm. So have fun and here goes..............
The stench and ugliness of war
has fertilized too many fields.
Regardless what the fight was for
were lost souls worth the meager yields?..................................................(bet ya'll were expecting a nature poem lol)
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Comments
scribbler
Mon, 2011-08-22 14:02
hi Rose
Very good. Not looking for perfect matching, just having some fun seeing where this winds up. Thanks for joining in.............stan
author commentscribbler
Mon, 2011-08-22 17:33
hi Rose
To suggest any changes would defeat the purpose of just letting folks have a bit of fun...........stan
author commentRhiannon1010
Mon, 2011-08-22 14:38
The stench and ugliness of
The stench and ugliness of war
has fertilized too many fields.
Regardless what the fight was for
were lost souls worth the meager yields?
Even in the absence of bloodied bodies
our earth is still soaked in blood.
The bones of many still lay unearthed
each crusade flows red in a ferocity flood
This place has seen violence.
This place has seen death.
Hopelessness and pain,
Things best laid to rest.
(how is this?)
scribbler
Mon, 2011-08-22 17:32
hi Rhia
This is fine, just for fun so I won't be doing any critique, just sitting back and watching where this goes. thanks for contributing...........stan
author commentBarbara Writes
Tue, 2011-08-23 02:43
Stan
the field of souls from many wars
yeilded much fruits and vegetation, and
the blood of the innocent
cry out for redemption
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2011-08-23 02:45
this is a wonderful
fun poem enjoyed participating
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scribbler
Tue, 2011-08-23 08:08
Hi Barbh
Just thought it would be interesting to see where this might lead. Thanks for your participation..........stan
author commentraj
Tue, 2011-08-23 03:27
Stan
i had said you will not improve...lol..like a ghost lurking in the shadows you keep nudging us..but you have caught me in your ghostly trap....i will surely play this game hahaha...
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Tue, 2011-08-23 08:12
lol
The dark scribbler lurking in the shadows, awaiting the unsuspecting poet to wander past so he can pounce and attack with his bent quill ...insert evil laughter here.............stan
author commentraj
Wed, 2011-08-24 16:02
that's exactly what i meant..
that's exactly what i meant...lol...
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Wed, 2011-08-24 16:34
Welll........
Awaiting your stanza.............stan
author commentraj
Wed, 2011-08-24 17:04
Stan..
Yes...i am very keen to do it...should be soon...
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Thu, 2011-08-25 04:14
Stan
stringing a piece to this chain...hope more will follow
The stench and ugliness of war
has fertilized too many fields.
Regardless what the fight was for
were lost souls worth the meager yields?..............(Stan)
Even in the absence of bloodied bodies
our earth is still soaked in blood.
The bones of many still lay unearthed
each crusade flows red in a ferocity flood ..............(Rosina)
This place has seen violence.
This place has seen death.
Hopelessness and pain,
Things best laid to rest. .............................................(Rhia)
How can souls Rest In Peace
though wreaths are laid on coffins
if whirlwinds of bloody wars
keep wrecking cherished lives?..............................(raj))
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Thu, 2011-08-25 08:57
hi raj
very good and thank you
author commentKailashana2
Thu, 2011-08-25 09:52
There is no rest when love
There is no rest when love isn't the answer
to the question: why does anything exist.at all?
May all beings be free of suffering may all things rest
in awareness from the mouth of love's forever call.
~Ac
scribbler
Thu, 2011-08-25 12:28
greetings
thanks for joining in. Maybe you could paste this to the previous one?.........stan
author commentBarbara Writes
Thu, 2011-08-25 14:22
ra j
why did you leave my stanza out. I thinking it just an oversight. add me please :)
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raj
Thu, 2011-08-25 14:46
Barbara
my apologies for leaving out your stanza...you are right it was through oversight and not intentional...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Rhiannon1010
Thu, 2011-08-25 14:42
This si what we got so far
The stench and ugliness of war
has fertilized too many fields.
Regardless what the fight was for
were lost souls worth the meager yields?........................................................stan
Even in the absence of bloodied bodies
our earth is still soaked in blood.
The bones of many still lay unearthed
each crusade flows red in a ferocity flood..........................................................xena
This place has seen violence.
This place has seen death.
Hopelessness and pain,
Things best laid to rest...........................................................................................rhia
the field of souls from many wars
yeilded much fruits and vegetation, and
the blood of the innocent
cry out for redemption..............................................................................................barbra
How can souls Rest In Peace
though wreaths are laid on coffins
if whirlwinds of bloody wars
keep wrecking cherished lives?.............................................................................raj
There is no rest when love isn't the answer
to the question: why does anything exist.at all?
May all beings be free of suffering may all things rest
in awareness from the mouth of love's forever call............................................kaila
raj
Thu, 2011-08-25 14:47
Thank you Rhia for stringing
Thank you Rhia for stringing all stanzas posted thus far...
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Thu, 2011-08-25 14:54
Stan
what is this form of poetry you have discovered and got us hooked?...is it "Stringlet"?...
Cheers!
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Thu, 2011-08-25 18:14
Hi raj
Can't take any credit for discovering this idea lol. I think it's called a group poem. First ran across one here , I think seren got one started and I joined in. I hope everybody is enjoying this............stan
author commentKailashana2
Thu, 2011-08-25 19:24
When I went to poetry
When I went to poetry readings in Cleveland, we did a *round robin* . Someone would start a poem and we would each add a line or two.
Always fun & interesting to see where it would go...
~A
scribbler
Thu, 2011-08-25 20:12
THAT'S IT!
Round Robin. Could not get the name to surface through my dense skull lol................stan
author commentraj
Thu, 2011-08-25 23:37
yeah..its fun for sure...
yeah..its fun for sure...
i knew this is called round robin ..i was kidding Stan..lol...
raj (sublime_ocean)