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We keep scrolling scrolling yeah…
When the news is sad and the views are grim
Enoughs enough long time had, just feel so full to the brim
Me daily dose of exercise, me decision swiping thumb
Who is right and who is wrong, all on a screen five inches long
We keep scrolling scrolling yeah…
Me mouth is shut and me conscience is numb
When me fingers are doin the talking, with the army bunch of dumbs
It’s their mess it’s their distress, doesn’t bother me take no stress
Not me kin not me pals, I needn’t cry if fall not me walls
We keep fooling fooling yeah…
Their sky is their roof, Earth is their bed
They’re guests in their own homes, rent is seven decades of bloodshed
Them not me mate not me folk, not me type so me not provoked
Their lives cheaper than ours, hell yeah it’s been a long funny joke
We keep rolling rolling yeah…
You’re showered by the powers to be, news to clean the hurt and bleed
Harsh bitter truth to swallow this, just gets buried under me newsfeed
Them want change then them should try, them to blame tis them who must cry
No you won’t admit their eyes ran dry, cos their pains make ya smile wry
They weep when crash ‘em walls on ‘em peeps, yer arrows and fire from the sky falls
While you keep banging ya heads, and weep at yer wailing Western Walls
We keep trolling trolling yeah…
Them now tenants in the land them once owned, yer the landlords and lords of the land
Them just perished, anguished and moaned.
Scattered all round the world you were, driven out, drained out and done
A roof you too deserve no doubt, a home, a land, the promised Canaan.
From scatters to squatters, whose land is this now any way
Throw out the gods who divide, let in the ones who provide,
You’re joined in hips together, together shall yous stay
We keep consoling consoling yeah…
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Thu, 2023-10-26 00:30
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem appears to use a unique and consistent voice, which contributes to its overall tone and style. The use of colloquial language and the repetition of phrases such as "We keep scrolling scrolling yeah…" adds a rhythmic quality to the poem and emphasizes the theme of indifference and disconnection in the digital age.
However, the poem could benefit from a clearer structure. There seems to be a lack of clear stanzas or breaks, which can make the poem difficult to follow. Additionally, the poem's message could be made clearer. While it seems to touch on themes of disconnection, indifference, and the impact of digital media, these themes could be more explicitly explored and developed.
The poem also uses a lot of indirect references and metaphors, which can make it difficult for the reader to understand the intended message. It might be helpful to make these references more explicit or to provide more context for them.
Lastly, the poem's language and grammar could be improved. The use of colloquial language and non-standard grammar can add to the poem's unique voice, but it can also make the poem difficult to read and understand. It might be helpful to revise the poem with a focus on clarity and readability.
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