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I Lost My Instructions
The rules that I used as my guide of life
Now are gone and create such strife
In the absence of those very rules
I lost my my most valuable tools
I dance to an unknown beat
And wander down an unknown street
If only I had not lost those directions
My life would would be filled with more affections
Now I search for the rules I lost
I realize the tremendous cost
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neopoet
Tue, 2024-08-20 13:23
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem, "I Lost My Instructions," effectively uses metaphor to communicate a sense of loss and confusion. The metaphor of lost instructions or rules as a guide to life is a powerful one, conveying the idea of feeling unmoored and directionless.
However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved. Firstly, there is a repetition of words in the lines "I lost my my most valuable tools" and "My life would would be filled with more affections." These repetitions seem to be unintentional and may distract the reader.
Secondly, the rhythm of the poem could be made more consistent. The poem seems to be aiming for a rhythmic structure, but there are places where the rhythm is disrupted, such as in the line "And wander down an unknown street." This line has one syllable less than its preceding line, which disrupts the flow of the poem.
Lastly, the poem could benefit from more specific imagery. While the metaphor of lost instructions is effective, the poem could be made more engaging by including more concrete details or images. For example, instead of saying "I dance to an unknown beat," the poem could describe the specific feeling or experience of dancing to an unknown beat.
In conclusion, while the poem effectively uses metaphor to convey a sense of loss and confusion, it could be improved by correcting the repetition of words, making the rhythm more consistent, and including more specific imagery.
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Leslie
Tue, 2024-08-20 08:32
Clentin
I appreciate your sentiments. I see value in them. I live by two simple rule. Be good and don't try to be right. Please comment on my poem.
All of God's children singing, holding hands in the rain!
Clentin
Tue, 2024-08-20 09:30
Thank you for reading. I
Thank you for reading. I appreciate it very much. There are instructions of all kinds, some are more important than others!
Candlewitch
Tue, 2024-08-20 08:35
Dear Clentin,
Your poetry is always top-drawer! I like it very much, as I have lost connection with my compass on occasion. good luck on the contest!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Clentin
Tue, 2024-08-20 09:28
I did not enter the contest.
I did not enter the contest. Just thoughts about instructions, some are more important than others.
Thank you for reading my poems and comments!
Candlewitch
Tue, 2024-08-20 09:30
I am sorry...
I thought you had. I think you should...
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Candlewitch
Tue, 2024-08-20 10:23
I am sorry...
I thought you had. I think you should...
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Clentin
Tue, 2024-08-20 09:28
I did not enter the contest.
I did not enter the contest. Just thoughts about instructions, some are more important than others.
Thank you for reading my poems and comments!
Clentin
Tue, 2024-08-20 09:28
I did not enter the contest.
I did not enter the contest. Just thoughts about instructions, some are more important than others.
Thank you for reading my poems and comments!