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Simple Tail

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Wed, 2024-07-31 17:26

I woke up this morning
angry at turtles, and parrots too.
They get so many years to be.

Who decided our dogs only get ten,
maybe fifteen brief years to be with us?

All that dog ever wanted was to be by our side,
the occasional extra treat and, of course,
his daily walk. All we really wanted
were a few more perfect days just like that.

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Lavender

Sat, 2024-08-03 19:11

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Touching, and relatable. There is a heavy void when our dogs are no longer there. They give so much in such a brief time.
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