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Rivers of the Mind
The rivers of my mind washed thoughts away,
scouring new realms to drive beauty to the fore.
There banks gave way to expose more history,
layer on layer, years of knowledge unravelled
Listen if you will there is a song being sung,
old songs of wayward peoples that walked.
Banks gave way showing people things,
broken dishes, and cups, just life hidden there.
Yet the people knew that in showing the old,
a new life could be felt and there revived.
Feelings washed clean as a mixture of years,
falling to the grasp of new waters, singing a dream.
Teach me to sort the feelings, to filter past woes,
show me the natural colours of the things I built.
Let new waters of the mind run free with my ways,
I look forward to the rapids, that invigorate and refresh.
Let my thoughts flow to the open arms of the Ocean,
there I can be at peace once more, to dwell within.
There inside that feeling of being refreshed and whole,
can again take over the running of my wayward soul.
Comments
raj
Sun, 2014-03-02 10:19
Ian
Good to see you back. It almost felt as if you were on an archeological mission of sorts. Always good to read your poems..
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Ian.T
Thu, 2014-03-06 16:23
raj
Thanks very much for your visit and good comment.
I have just returned, now a few other things to sort out first,
Talk to you later, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
alidzain
Sun, 2014-03-02 14:23
wonderful, Ian
thanks for sharing..
Alid
Ian.T
Thu, 2014-03-06 16:25
Alid
Glad that you liked this short one I expect that there was more I could have put in there but later when more time,
Take care, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
loved
Mon, 2014-03-03 08:14
U as usual limit
rivers... to one's mind
I compare a whole life
to a meandering river
from the mountains to the oceans
and Stan adds on
the return through evaporation
scientific poetry evolution
the journey yours
and
my everlasting sojourn
are on and on
and
onnnnnnnnnnn
loved
Ian.T
Thu, 2014-03-06 16:28
Loved
I wrote a longer one with the complete cycle a while back ,
when time permits I will look it out for you,
Meanwhile you take care of yourself,
Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Mon, 2014-03-03 09:26
Ian
I really enjoyed this thought experiment, I think it can be improved on a little, maybe I can offer some suggestions tomorrow night I am sick as a dog I got food poisoning today I went out for lunch and got bit lol
be back tomorrow night
love always Jayne x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Thu, 2014-03-06 16:31
Jayne
There's no panic about improving the write,
when time permits I will look into what to do.
You look after you and stop eating bad things.
Yours as usual, Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
emeka ozurumba
Mon, 2014-03-03 11:28
ian
your thoughts will never be washed away by time but established
Ian.T
Thu, 2014-03-06 16:33
Emeka
Lovely to have you visit and a comment that will be thought about,
Take care,
Yours Ian . T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Emina Smajevic
Thu, 2014-03-06 15:05
Ian
really good as always
I enjoyed
what else to say
Emina
Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.
Rumi
Ian.T
Thu, 2014-03-06 16:35
Emina
Great to walk with you for a while,
I shall have a bit more time soon to try a better one or two,
we will see,
Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..