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Dorian Gray in Hexadecimal Pastels
I am the gigabyte’s cracked tooth,
the GIF peeling in a Harvard darkroom.
Our profile picture floats in here in ReelTime;
What was your first memory?
I am the Like Liquor, the Pixel Party, the Virtual
Opioid and Synthetic Letter Bend. Our profile picture
floats here in an Instagram pond, move closer.
Stay. The aluminum of your trackpad massage
warms the blue chill, come closer. Download begun.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
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Comments
Esker
Mon, 2014-11-17 01:49
Crumb
"lake of liquor..the Pixelation partiers
Opiod synthetic letter bender..."
"heats my blue Chill"....
bit
byte
crumb
excellent poem
my changes are just small
personifications
of which is my own
struggle of late
and the de cluttering
of excess descripters
this is like magic this
poetry
and Im not that great at
this..
But Im doing what I can
to comment on other
poets work which is
actually working
because it gets me
looking into my own
works...
This is a very clever
poem
Thank You!
Ian.T
Mon, 2014-11-17 10:12
Quill
Well, Pixilated Penguins my heavens, you have been away two years.
Your imagination and flow of words even though about the ether and it's key prints as apposed to paw prints, is good.
Hope you start to write more here,
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
quillsveinback
Mon, 2014-11-17 16:57
Thank
You Both. Great to be back.
JTA
quillsveinback
Mon, 2014-11-17 22:17
This
poem is about Mark Zuckerberg
JTA