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Paint me red
Paint me red
I paint a light
when tis darkness and others can't see
Fluorescence paint is needed for me
to ensure they can see
my silhouette
out in the darkness
a vision of the only one
of a kind of me
your own take friend
that's me.....
now there is no more glee
no light for me
this is what I in your poetry see
won’t call it blasphemy
as distance alone
lends beauty to a scene
we have once good friends been...
haven’t we?
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
weirdelf
Thu, 2015-04-30 08:53
A srong and meaningful pathos.
One of your gems. No whining for attention, an exemplar of alienation.
In short,
a gem.
cheers,
Jess
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lovedly
Thu, 2015-04-30 09:12
thanks Jess
u say I am no poet---------------------------------
some ones gave me a
BRONZE
for this.... u also call a gem thanks
i write once in a while
as earthquakes aren't too often
regards
medicine and meditation are ur panacea j\friend
weirdelf
Thu, 2015-04-30 12:15
gem = poet
I can't apologise enough.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
lovedly
Thu, 2015-04-30 13:20
thanks Jess
bows...................
Rula
Thu, 2015-04-30 15:43
There is creativity
and I like the idea of "Fluorescence paint"
You shine beloved without the flurenscene paint. You do with your unique style.
welcome back.
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lovedly
Fri, 2015-05-01 01:09
thanks Rula 4 ur lovely inspiring words
they gave me a
BRONZE
for this in some competition
stay blessed
judyanne
Fri, 2015-05-01 00:16
nice one loved
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Geremia
Fri, 2015-05-01 10:30
Great write, I agree fully with the other crtiques
Great write. I fully agree with the other critiques.
be well,
joe
lovedly
Fri, 2015-05-01 12:25
no waffle no!
Glad you liked it Judy
emeka ozurumba
Sat, 2015-05-02 08:59
writing without cacophony...
this is natural, i loved the way it was composed
lovedly
Sat, 2015-05-02 15:14
grand of u to say so
kindness again
two poems u glanced today
come again my way