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Born To Live
You are born to live
not just exist
to dwell in pure grief,
devoid of peace.
Breathe
the fresh clean air,
the hopes and dreams.
You know they're there,
Reclaim your joy
when laughter is muted.
Seek you knowledge
to be free as a bird.
Feel your sorrow
but never drown in it.
there's still tomorrow,
so gather your wits.
Living is not
the absence of sadness
it is to move on
beyond the bitterness.
Build some memories
in nostalgic moments.
Don't be trapped by the past,
learn from life's lessons.
Find love
in honesty and compassion
and may every single day
be a real celebration.
Live your life well
and die without regret.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments
Geremia
Thu, 2015-12-17 14:56
This is beautifully written,
This is beautifully written, Alid. So well balanced, and each stanza filled with WISDOM.
joe
alidzain
Thu, 2015-12-17 16:10
Joe
Thanks, for the visit, the read and the comment.
Alid
Buddha
Mon, 2015-12-28 23:25
We all die but not all live.
We all die but not all live. Good poetic advice, Do not just exist but live. I enjoyed your poem and love the style.Buddha
alidzain
Tue, 2015-12-29 13:31
Thanks Buddha
for the visit, the read and comment.
Alid
lovedly
Tue, 2015-12-29 13:18
NICE COMING... out from you alidz
I always say
life is purposeless
but make it purposeful
live you have to
die when you
DIE
alidzain
Tue, 2015-12-29 13:32
loved
that's another way to put it, bro. lol. Glad you liked it.
Alid
lovedly
Tue, 2015-12-29 13:44
Yeah now read this how I lived
Minus 10 to start with
will become 27 soon
I'm told
so I remain bold
when I was new
minus 35 I went into
came out all in blue
alcohol and hot coffee did they brew
but I wanted chicken stew
and
why they all had no clue
I was all inside my body blue
none knew
the blood also froze
how I survived heaven only knows
it could have been
what do they say blast me
yeah hypodermia could be
no, no hypothermia I suppose
I over dozed
alidzain
Tue, 2015-12-29 14:43
hmmm
interesting.
Alid
Sparrow
Tue, 2015-12-29 19:22
Salam Alid
I see you,
there in the shade you are a light,
there in the light you are a beacon.
Great write and this write will mean a lot to many as we journey on.
That you have embraced life and lived builds a spirit strong.
Go well my friend and stay as you are always,
Yours, Ian..
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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
alidzain
Wed, 2015-12-30 03:00
Thanks Ian
for the visit, the read and the comment. Send my regards, love and hugs to Jayne for me, will ya?I really miss her but I've been too busy with responsibilities in the malay poet group, work and family. After one of my colleagues passed away, we are all bearing the bulk of his duties due to lack of manpower but I'm still hanging on.
Alid