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coming for an audition
coming for an audition
When eyes meet
we smile
but look away for a while
then again through the corner of an eye
we look glancing by
and then one winks
it’s always me
then the wink is returned smilingly
we come forward simultaneously
a step on her foot
she says ouch
and I say vouch
we kiss
then dance
it’s a beginning of a romance
we sing
she is happy we fling
then when time's up
we get the band roll
then another gal comes
for a free stroll
the same story we repeat
Gals sorry
Now I am in a bit of a hurry
Tomorrow may be....
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2016-02-05 18:24
Ahhhh...
You sharp little blade, you! Ready to rip and tear through all the pretty young things in town.
I like the little dance you have made. ~ Gee
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lovedly
Fri, 2016-02-05 21:02
thank you
i like ur aaahhhhhhhss and wows
its though simple vows
scribbler
Sat, 2016-02-06 08:04
Hello!
The flirtations of youth are well conveyed here (and one can be old but still young at heart lol) Liked the use of random rhyme to tie this together.........stan
lovedly
Sat, 2016-02-06 10:23
I am also in random
love with the youth
what is love
not sex as for old
its love warmth
and for both
the young and bold
u too Stan
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